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beeflyonion Member

 Joined: 12 Mar 2006 Posts: 12 Location: Burgersfort, South Africa
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Posted: Sun Mar 12, 2006 8:27 pm
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Another old fable from my grandmother. Please tell me your comments.
Once was an old fisherman who lived under a waterfall. He fished with a large stabbing spear and put the fish inside his sack. He was very happy until one day he heard a cat running towards him shouting for help. Apparently, a man was chasing after him with a stabbing knife. He put him in his fish sack to hide him and told the man with the stabbing knife he went the other way.
He brought the cat to his waterfall cave where he could be safe, then the cat asked to be let loose and the fisherman set him free. He then went back to spear fishing with the cat still in his cave. The cat could leave, but he didn't.
The cat watched the fisherman put the fish into his sack and became hungry. He soon said, "Fisherman, I am hungry. If you do not feed me soon, I will have to stab you to death with my claws and eat you because you are old and frail and I am very hungry."
The Fisherman hadn't many fish in his sack, and he needed the food. He was afraid of the cat, so he took the cat to the court of the animals to be sentenced. Because all the animals thought the cat was truly evil and would kill them as well if they said otherwise, they decided the cat could kill the fisherman.
Then, the monkey, one of the final judges asked the fisherman, "Will you show me how you carried the cat home? I can decide if you deserve to be aten from how you carried him home."
The cat knew that a sack was no way to be taken home, so it crawled into the sack, allowing the fisherman to tie it, and said it was cramped and uncomfortable.
"Now," Said the monkey, "If you want to live, do us all a favor and stab the sack with your fishing spear."
The fisherman stabbed the sack with the fishing spear until the cat died, then threw it into a fire and burned it.
The moral is to not be too quick to help those with a problem; often they are the true problem themselves.
Please give me feedback. I am compiling all my stories to be published. |
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Cakephatt Expert

 Joined: 10 Oct 2004 Posts: 196 Location: i live in a box
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Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 1:32 pm
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Great story! Although I think personally you should change the "Stabbing" with "Drowning" in the end, and maybe because you no longer stab people you should make the spear fisherman a regular fisherman. And you lie, you just wanted to write another story about stabbing people. You arent getting it published. And you also aren't really from burgersfort. You just picked the town because it sounded exotic and had the word "Burger" in it.
Hey! Look at that. We have the same avatars! |
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emmzee Site Admin

 Joined: 14 Sep 2002 Posts: 1887 Location: Mississauga, Ontario, Canada
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Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 9:43 pm
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Stop smoking teh crack. "Both" of you. |
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Dogbreath Admin

 Joined: 14 Sep 2002 Posts: 3913 Location: In the back of a jacked-up Ford.
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Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 11:16 pm
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| Interesting story, I definately liked it, even if your little self criticism at the end was bordering on severe mental illness. Please keep it up with these stories. |
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Cakephatt Expert

 Joined: 10 Oct 2004 Posts: 196 Location: i live in a box
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Posted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:41 pm
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| You really liked it? I mean, you don't think its mental retardid but you read it all the way? I would like to write a story with you. You can begin. |
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The_Sinister_Mastermind Overlord
 Joined: 26 Oct 2005 Posts: 2757 Location: NSW, Australia, Down Under Verse
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Posted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 7:33 pm
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| For lack of a better word, that was interesting. |
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julie124 Gaming Demi-god

 Joined: 18 Dec 2004 Posts: 2077 Location: The land that is found and new
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Posted: Mon Mar 20, 2006 10:42 am
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it was ok  |
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Wally*Won_Kenobie i r teh pwnage
 Joined: 01 May 2003 Posts: 3685 Location: Australia, earth, Milky way
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 1:48 am
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ok Once Upon a Time....
There was two pot smoking dorks named cakephatt and beeflyonion, anyway the story begins when one of them falls three storys down and inflates LIKE A BALLON AND GETS THROWN OVERBOARD A PIRATE SHIP then the pirate throws them over board THEN THEY TURN INTO Goofy Goobers.
To be cont... |
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The_Sinister_Mastermind Overlord
 Joined: 26 Oct 2005 Posts: 2757 Location: NSW, Australia, Down Under Verse
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 2:09 am
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| Meh, I liked beeflyonion's story better. |
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franpa Way too much free time

 Joined: 02 Jan 2006 Posts: 912 Location: australia, qld
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 3:44 am
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thats just freaky wally!  |
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julie124 Gaming Demi-god

 Joined: 18 Dec 2004 Posts: 2077 Location: The land that is found and new
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 7:27 am
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| hahahha it sounds like the story of a coupleof my buddies.. well except for the pirate ship.. and everything else.. but their pot smoking dorks..lol:P |
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JKSM Way too much free time

 Joined: 27 Apr 2003 Posts: 480
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 9:07 am
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| Nice story except reading it now I don't find it interesting as I have heard this before. When I was a kid (around 5 to 12 years old), I love to read such stories from books and magazines. Read many folktales as well as animal stories and stories with morals behind them. I had especially loved stories like how the rabbit lost it's tale / dog became man's best friend, how the platapus come about, how the elephant ...., how the redhill got it's name etc and stories on giants, witches & warlocks. Many of the books I have given away. However there are a few such books that I have kept. If anyone is interested in such stories, I'll find some time to type out for you to read. |
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Wally*Won_Kenobie i r teh pwnage
 Joined: 01 May 2003 Posts: 3685 Location: Australia, earth, Milky way
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 5:34 pm
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| That story was just fromt he top of my head. |
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The_Sinister_Mastermind Overlord
 Joined: 26 Oct 2005 Posts: 2757 Location: NSW, Australia, Down Under Verse
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 3:10 am
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| JKSM wrote: | | Nice story except reading it now I don't find it interesting as I have heard this before. When I was a kid (around 5 to 12 years old), I love to read such stories from books and magazines. Read many folktales as well as animal stories and stories with morals behind them. I had especially loved stories like how the rabbit lost it's tale / dog became man's best friend, how the platapus come about, how the elephant ...., how the redhill got it's name etc and stories on giants, witches & warlocks. Many of the books I have given away. However there are a few such books that I have kept. If anyone is interested in such stories, I'll find some time to type out for you to read. |
Could prove interesting if you find the time, though you might want to use a scanner rather then typing it all up. |
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Wally*Won_Kenobie i r teh pwnage
 Joined: 01 May 2003 Posts: 3685 Location: Australia, earth, Milky way
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 6:29 pm
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| We cant really type or scan them without permission from the original author. unless its referenced heavly |
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