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The Fisherman And The Monkey
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Would you buy my story if in a book?
yes
42%
 42%  [ 3 ]
no
42%
 42%  [ 3 ]
I can't read/afford it/find the time but I would like to.
14%
 14%  [ 1 ]
Total Votes : 7

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beeflyonion
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PostPosted: Sun Mar 12, 2006 8:27 pm     Post subject: The Fisherman And The Monkey Reply with quote

Another old fable from my grandmother. Please tell me your comments.

Once was an old fisherman who lived under a waterfall. He fished with a large stabbing spear and put the fish inside his sack. He was very happy until one day he heard a cat running towards him shouting for help. Apparently, a man was chasing after him with a stabbing knife. He put him in his fish sack to hide him and told the man with the stabbing knife he went the other way.
He brought the cat to his waterfall cave where he could be safe, then the cat asked to be let loose and the fisherman set him free. He then went back to spear fishing with the cat still in his cave. The cat could leave, but he didn't.
The cat watched the fisherman put the fish into his sack and became hungry. He soon said, "Fisherman, I am hungry. If you do not feed me soon, I will have to stab you to death with my claws and eat you because you are old and frail and I am very hungry."
The Fisherman hadn't many fish in his sack, and he needed the food. He was afraid of the cat, so he took the cat to the court of the animals to be sentenced. Because all the animals thought the cat was truly evil and would kill them as well if they said otherwise, they decided the cat could kill the fisherman.
Then, the monkey, one of the final judges asked the fisherman, "Will you show me how you carried the cat home? I can decide if you deserve to be aten from how you carried him home."
The cat knew that a sack was no way to be taken home, so it crawled into the sack, allowing the fisherman to tie it, and said it was cramped and uncomfortable.
"Now," Said the monkey, "If you want to live, do us all a favor and stab the sack with your fishing spear."
The fisherman stabbed the sack with the fishing spear until the cat died, then threw it into a fire and burned it.

The moral is to not be too quick to help those with a problem; often they are the true problem themselves.

Please give me feedback. I am compiling all my stories to be published.
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Cakephatt
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 1:32 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

Great story! Although I think personally you should change the "Stabbing" with "Drowning" in the end, and maybe because you no longer stab people you should make the spear fisherman a regular fisherman. And you lie, you just wanted to write another story about stabbing people. You arent getting it published. And you also aren't really from burgersfort. You just picked the town because it sounded exotic and had the word "Burger" in it.
Hey! Look at that. We have the same avatars!
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emmzee
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 9:43 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

Stop smoking teh crack. Confuzzled "Both" of you.
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 11:16 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting story, I definately liked it, even if your little self criticism at the end was bordering on severe mental illness. Please keep it up with these stories.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:41 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

You really liked it? I mean, you don't think its mental retardid but you read it all the way? I would like to write a story with you. You can begin.
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The_Sinister_Mastermind
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 7:33 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

For lack of a better word, that was interesting.
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julie124
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 20, 2006 10:42 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

it was ok Congratulatory
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Wally*Won_Kenobie
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 1:48 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

ok Once Upon a Time....
There was two pot smoking dorks named cakephatt and beeflyonion, anyway the story begins when one of them falls three storys down and inflates LIKE A BALLON AND GETS THROWN OVERBOARD A PIRATE SHIP then the pirate throws them over board THEN THEY TURN INTO Goofy Goobers.

To be cont...
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 2:09 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

Meh, I liked beeflyonion's story better.
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franpa
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 3:44 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

thats just freaky wally! Shit-Eating Grin
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 7:27 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

hahahha it sounds like the story of a coupleof my buddies.. well except for the pirate ship.. and everything else.. but their pot smoking dorks..lol:P
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 9:07 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice story except reading it now I don't find it interesting as I have heard this before. When I was a kid (around 5 to 12 years old), I love to read such stories from books and magazines. Read many folktales as well as animal stories and stories with morals behind them. I had especially loved stories like how the rabbit lost it's tale / dog became man's best friend, how the platapus come about, how the elephant ...., how the redhill got it's name etc and stories on giants, witches & warlocks. Many of the books I have given away. However there are a few such books that I have kept. If anyone is interested in such stories, I'll find some time to type out for you to read.
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Wally*Won_Kenobie
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 5:34 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

That story was just fromt he top of my head.
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 3:10 am     Post subject: Reply with quote

JKSM wrote:
Nice story except reading it now I don't find it interesting as I have heard this before. When I was a kid (around 5 to 12 years old), I love to read such stories from books and magazines. Read many folktales as well as animal stories and stories with morals behind them. I had especially loved stories like how the rabbit lost it's tale / dog became man's best friend, how the platapus come about, how the elephant ...., how the redhill got it's name etc and stories on giants, witches & warlocks. Many of the books I have given away. However there are a few such books that I have kept. If anyone is interested in such stories, I'll find some time to type out for you to read.

Could prove interesting if you find the time, though you might want to use a scanner rather then typing it all up.
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Wally*Won_Kenobie
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 6:29 pm     Post subject: Reply with quote

We cant really type or scan them without permission from the original author. unless its referenced heavly
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